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提供大学文书申请写作和修改

 

现在已经到了大学申请的季节,本人协助中国学生报考加拿大和美国各类大学入学,包括UBC, SFU, UVic,并帮助他们写作或修改各类申请文书。保证满意,不满意全额退款。

 案例:

下面是一个学生去年申请UBC所写的profile中一段短文。

  1. Tell us more about ONE or TWO activities listed above that are most important to you. Please explain the role you played and what you learned in the process. You will asked for a reference who can speak to your response. (Maximum 350 words)

 

I found to volunteer in a Special Education centre and organized the Children Book Drive were the most important to me. Firstly, as a volunteer Special Education. My job was to teach cerebral palsy children and I found there are many people  need our help through the process. This event also let me to understood how lucky I am, and gave me more power to study for my goal. Furthermore, Though the children Books donation activity I learned how to organize from collecting books, making posters, and making book drive. Also I found it was very important to work with others, because you can learn more things that you don’t know, get more idea from others, and the project will be faster. In addition, this activity reminded me a British proverb “The roses in her hand, the flavor in mine.” This quote state helping others will benefit yourself as well, and I found I was happy and learned  a lot amazing experience from this event. Also I found the significance of people’s life is to help others. because my work have made people who need help got better.

 

很明显,学生所写的短文不但字数少(不到200),而且有标点和语法错误。另外,内容面面俱到,反而自己的优势没有体现出来。经过我的修改,学生的优势体现了出来,并且字数正好达到了350个,结果学生顺利进入UBC。

 

I found volunteering in a Special Education Centre and organizing the Children Book Drive to be the most important two activities to me. Firstly, as a volunteer in the centre, my job was to teach cerebral palsy children how to read. This activity required great patience, love and care. I learned that those handicapped children had great desire to learn. They wanted to improve their reading skills as strongly as ordinary children so that they could browse in the sea of knowledge. Though they had great difficulties pronouncing and reading, they never gave up on themselves. So, I put all my free time and effort to help realize their dreams. In addition,  their spirit of never giving up moved me deeply and had great influence on myself in that I would never give up on anything that I am pursuing because this is the only way that leads up to success.

On the other hand, through the Children Book Drive activity, I learned the importance of teamwork. In order to make an activity success, you have to first have a group of friends who speak the common language with you and who share the same ideas and same interest with you. Then, you’ll have to demonstrate good leadership skills to other team members so that they will be convinced that you are the right guy who can lead them to success. In addition, you’ll have the ability to organize the components of the activity in a proper order in which the most important thing is given the priority to deal with. Finally, as a leader, you must be competent in doing many things that require certain skills. For example, if you want to use posters to attract students to donate their books, you must be capable of making eye-catching posters in which pictures, drawings and descriptive words are combined in a logical way. Fortunately, this book donation event enabled me to demonstrate all those skills, which were also further sharpened through this event.  Therefore, organizing this event not only benefited the children who are in need but also benefited myself.

 

总之,百看不如一试。欢迎准备报考加拿大大学的小伙伴们利用微信和邮件和我建立联系,将你们的要求和文书发给我。你们一定会为自己的正确选择而感到庆幸。

本人同时提供优质的英语补习服务:

ESL 跳级,雅思,English 9-12,SSAT,SAT, LPI。

 

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